it was done raining~

it was done raining-
the sky still wore her damp skirts,
unbraiding her dark plaits,
while afternoon swallowed
the milky warmth off sleepy-cribs.
i let the dampness reign.
inside colors wore off, in
saccharine silence dilute light
thumbed through ages
i found your smile intact
in inbetween all my nerves.

it was done raining-
on the portico, leaves courted
half-bloomed buds and stars
twilight slowly filtered in,
arms full with petrichor-
i let the moment reign,
isolated in shadows,
remembering when you had
held rain drops in your palms
and said it tasted sweet
i had kissed you instead…

©Mohana Das

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22 thoughts on “it was done raining~

  1. wow..beginning with marvelous lines ‘the sky still wore her damp skirts, unbraiding her dark plaits..’ i took my breath away and held it until the last. a unique poem of imagery to be treasured, of words blooming with vivid beauty. thank you so much for this~~

  2. This is unbelievably gorgeous and deep:

    “inside colors wore off, in
    saccharine silence dilute light
    thumbed through ages
    i found your smile intact
    in inbetween all my nerves” … (typo in the last line)

    I love these as well: “on the portico, leaves courted” and “arms full with petrichor”

    Big smiles for the ending:
    “held rain drops in your palms
    and said it tasted sweet
    i had kissed you instead…”

  3. I see this as faded light like faded memory with one precious image intact: “in
    saccharine silence dilute light
    thumbed through ages
    i found your smile intact
    in between all my nerves.”
    And then you treat us to the whole memory, with the kiss, a happy time, everything was courting!

    Both stanzas begin with “It was done raining” and so as life goes on I can imagine another stanza and another and I wonder when he is there again . . .

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