that day bloomed delicate-
a wilted rose-
he had been counting heartbeats
overhead a bridge arched deceptive
the river was still asleep
breathing soft smoke in tandems
he drowned himself, disappointed
i lay mangled a few feet away,
clad in his shroud of delirious fog-
©Mohana Das
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insanebloom 
nicely penned… reading while imagining i was there…
JJRod’z
hmmm I understand though I only understand what I want to understand….
a nice piece
O! sad and delicate. i so enjoy you gentle
pen and your fragile words on the human condition.
Beautifully written. I like your ideas.
Sad and serene feel altogether.
I like it. 🙂
Beautiful yet very troubling and sad!
I love this Mohana – it’s very beautiful. “He had been counting heartbeats”… and then no heartbeats for anyone to count.
Counting heartbeats is so beautiful…
Mohana–I love your poetry. This stunned me. You set a gentle, serene mood and then…! Sad, indeed.
You’ve captured the melancholy feel of the picture very well.
haunting.
looks like he’s going to jump in to me tooo!!
under windsor bridge senryu
Do you really believe God drowns himself? 🙂 For sure God seeks “death” by being damned, but drowning himself, disappointed, sounds so sad. It is not live giving. Nice picture of a moment, though. 🙂
counting heartbeats-very haunting
wow…interesting progression of images…the counting heart beats…the river breathing fog…great use of language there in the end…the image of you mangled is very strong….
So beautiful and tragic.
Your poem is so expressive Mohana and reflective of the clouded details expressed in the artwork. It seems fitting to end with a very tragic conclusion. Thank you for sharing your talent. =D
You have spoken with elegance what you saw in the painting. I too felt it has a haunting image.
very poetic…..you painted the picture perfect once again……
Very beautiful lines…
I saw as i read, awesome~
And so our hearts can be crushed by the downfall of the aspirations of one we care about.
Sad and lovely.
=)
So sad, if I’d been there I’d throw him a safety line! Very nice!
It does ride on a sad but beautiful flow.
Great take on the prompt. Such a tragic tale with a great twist. Great images in your words,
Mine is here
Have you a ROCKING AND WEEK!!!
hugs
shakira
nice
Stopped heartbeat, and you, mangled – very poignant.
Amazing, scenic imagery. Wonderful write.
So beautiful and poignant as they slip into the waters more or less Together, thanks Mohana
Beautiful, delicate and very well written.
I love the river asleep and breathing soft smoke.
You were there…
🙂
Beautiful!